Fate/Grand Order story · Events, Eternal Tropical Summer Altar, Luluhawa

A Wonderful Fairytale of a Wonderful Holy Maiden

Eternal Tropical Summer Altar, Luluhawa. Hotel

2 scenes, 81 lines

1. Before the battle

64 lines
Jeanne Alter

...Let's take a break, Fujimaru.

What's with the look?

...Everything's getting jumbled up in my head, so I want to decompress. Come and join me at the beach.

Your choice

Sure.

Jeanne Alter

Can't you at least ay something polite, like "It would be my honor" or something?

Your choice

It would be my honor.

Jeanne Alter

What do you think this is, one of Shakespeare's plays? Can't you just say "sure" like a normal person?

?!

...What is it now? Think I was gonna gripe at you no matter what you said there?

Yeah, I was! Got a problem!?

Your choice

She admitted it!

Jeanne Alter

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...I'm stuck on where to take the story from here.

If we use the drafts we have now, I think the story will feel like it's dragging on a bit.

But I'm worried that if I cut scenes to speed things up, later developments are gonna feel contrived.

Your choice

Could you cut some stuff from the first half?

Jeanne Alter

?!

N-no way! We need those scenes for world-building!

...Then again, reading it over now, I'm more embarrassed than anything. I guess world-building isn't really that important...

The readers aren't gonna care how the world got the way it is, or what its god is like...

What do you think? Do you think it feels tedious? Is it okay to linger on the details like this?

Your choice

I think it's great.

Jeanne Alter

?!

...All right, I'll stick with it then.

It's so quiet here...

Whoa... Did you hear that? I think it might've been a dolphin.

Your choice

You might be right.

Jeanne Alter

You don't see those every day. Let's go look for it!

Your choice

You sure it wasn't Fou?

Jeanne Alter

No way.

That squirrel thing only knows how to say its own name, anyway.

?!

I think it came from around here.

Jeanne

Oh, hello, you two. Taking a moonlit walk on the beach? Hehe, that's so romantic!

Jeanne Alter

You're dead.

Your choice

Whoa whoa whoa, easy there!

You need to tone down your knee-jerk reactions.

Jeanne Alter

?!

Jeanne

It's okay, Master.

As her big sister, I understand very well what she's like.

Jeanne Alter

You're not my sister.

...Wait, never mind that. What's the deal with that dolphin behind you?

Jeanne

Hehe, isn't he adorable?

As it turns out...

Anastasia

Thank you, Ms. Holy Maiden!

Yay! I've always wanted a picture with Jeanne d'Arc!

Jeanne

Not at all. It was my pleasure.

Huh? What was that...?

Well hello, Mr. Dolphin. What are you doing here?

Oh no. You're hurt...!

All right...

In the name of the Lord, I appoint you my familiar.

There you go. Now you can come with me.

Jeanne Alter

What kinda fairy-tale crap is that?

Don't go around making more familiars just 'cause you feel like it!

And what's with those glasses, anyway!? You tryin' to be cute or something?

Jeanne

Teehee☆

Your choice

D'awww.

Jeanne

?!

Hehe, while we're on the subject, I actually still have one more transformation up my sleeve.

I don't know when I'll get to show it to you...

...so for now, I'll settle for taking out these coconut crabs alongside my familiar here, Reece.

Guess this means I'll be having coconut crab for dinner! Yum!

Jeanne Alter

...Uh, "yum" is not a word that comes to mind when I look at them...

2. After the battle

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Jeanne

Get out of here!

Jeanne Alter

...So what about you, Ms. Holy Maiden? How's your book coming along?

Jeanne

Oh my, are you worried about me? As your sister, that makes me really happy.

Jeanne Alter

How many times have I gotta tell you we aren't sisters!? We're not even related you dumbass!

Your choice

Wouldn't you, uh, HAVE to be related?

Jeanne Alter

?!

I know! It just sorta came out before I realized what I was saying!

Jeanne

We're doing fine, thank you. Hehe, in fact, we're almost done.

I've got all the dolphin reference material I need, thanks to my office assistant Reece here.

My story this year is about summer, the sea, and dolphins, and I'm going to make sure it turns out wonderfully!

Jeanne Alter

Oh yeah? So you're not following up on the witch, princess, and monster story, huh?

I was kinda expecting you to do a sequel to that.

Well, whatever. See you around, Ms. Holy Maiden.

Come on, Master.

While Little Miss Holy's out taking a walk, we're gonna catch up as much as possible!

Jeanne

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Hmm... Looks like things are getting interesting!